An Alessandro Review: Behemoth and the Wisp by Linn Edwards

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Rating: 2 stars out of 5

 

The Compound protects the remnants of often horrific human experimentation during World War II. Now a new generation comes of age, some with strange powers and abilities, groomed to be weapons for justice.

Mason and Jordie are young men, each with a special gift and strongly attracted to each other. When they finally reach out and really connect, they must also be careful. Mason can become intangible like a mist, then completely whole and solid again — even during sex. Jordie is a nine foot tall giant, able to leap great distances in a single bound. Together they face challenges in figuring out sex and love.

When a woman in their group at The Compound appears to be kidnapped, Mason and Jordie must put aside their own secrets to help her. But they soon discover everyone secrets, and not everyone in The Compound is who they seem.

 

Mason aka The Wisp and Jordie aka Behemoth are living in a compound founded by the government, they are basically heroes in training. They are told that they would be safe in the compound, but when Mason wants to get some alone time to relieve the sexual tension he has build up because of Jordie, his room-mate, one of their fellow companions gets kidnapped. So Behemoth and The Wisp has to work together to solve the problem that came up. Not only the kidnapping, but other things that seem strange in the compound.

First of all, I really liked the first few pages of this book. Basically it was the only thing I liked about this book.

The first few pages actually explain how those super heroes came to be. Also there was a small side-story about a folks-tale, which was quite interesting. I didn’t know the name of the folks-tale, but apparently it is called “Widows Walk” at least that’s what it’s called what the woman does in said Folks-tale.

It was quite a good beginning and I thought, this is probably relevant to the story in this book, because there is also this woman, who is just named “Madame” in this facility who is basically the “mother figure” of said super heroes in training. But I thought wrong. It wasn’t something I expected.

 The story was really fast paced, after only a few minutes I was already at 15% or something. So I thought to myself, that this is just a super short story, so I lowered my expectations about this book. But even then I couldn’t really find anything to enjoy about this book. Every time a problem came up, it was resolved in a few sentences. There was no story build up at all, there was no struggle at all. I thought this book would involve some action, but there was like minimum to non action. The sex scenes were quite predictable, because every time there was progress in the plot there was a sex scene. Then came another plot scene and another sex scene.

I also struggled with the relationship of the MC. Yes it is said that those MC know each other for some years know, but neither of them exploited their sexual desire or emotions. I just thought there was not a real connection between those two, maybe there was, but we, as readers, didn’t get to read about that. And after one event they’re in love and behave like they were in a relationship for I don’t know how long?

To my next point. I didn’t enjoy the writing either. It was good to some extend, but even I who is not a native English speaker, could see some mistakes in tenses and grammar.

This book is written in third person POV, so I expect, when I’m following more than one person, that in every chapter or section there will be an indication to which person I’m following at the moment. This was the case, to some extent. Often I was confused which person I was following in the moment, so I had to reread some sections of the books, which is quite shocking, because it was such a short story.

I feel like there was such potential in this book. The ideas were great, but the execution was lacking. This story would be okay, if it would be a start of graphic novel or a comic book? But not really in book form. There was just not much to picture here, so I think the author didn’t do a good job in portraying the story she wanted to tell.

 

The cover of “Behemoth and the Wisp” by “Written Ink Designs” was okay. I think it could be used to any book about super heroes to be honest. Although the suits of the characters portrayed in the cover didn’t match the suits of the characters in the book.

 

Sales links:   JMS Books LLC | Amazon

Book Details:

ebook
Published April 22nd 2017 by JMS Books LLC
ISBN139781634863650